CaitlinBiggers
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Digital Archive
My contribution to the digital archive will focus on Gertrude Vanderbilt Whitney, The Whitney Studio Club, the creation of Whitney Museum of American Art and it's early Collections in efforts to illustrate the role of the Ms. Whitney and her salon in popularizing American modern art.
Web Exhibit
My Web Exhibit will highlight Gertrude Vanderbilt Whitney, the creation of the Whitney Studio Club, the critique and exhibition methods the studio employed and its role in elevating the status of American Modern Art in the early 20th century.
Research Question:The Whitney Studio Club and the Rise of American Modernism
Add a link to the exhibit. [http://addlink]
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Caitlin your introduction is great! It lays out the history very neatly and I get a clear picture of what you hope to do with the exhibit. Your second page has a couple typos (did you mean to leave the splash quote without capitals? I wasn't sure if you were doing that for an aesthetic reason maybe.) but, again, keeps the reader engaged on what has the potential to be a very complicated (or dry, written by the wrong person) topic. The one suggestion I might make, is one I struggle with myself and I don't know how possible it would be, given your topic, but your sentence structure and language might be a bit academic for the setting. I know Cathy has suggested running my text through one of the online readers that tells you what grade level you're writing at, and that might be helpful if you wanted to do some simplifying. Again, I don't know how possible that would be, but it might be worth looking into.
The timeline was also very helpful. With Whitney's work affecting the art movement and people's lives over such a long period of time, it's great to be able to see it laid out, and you definitely picked the most attractive timeline to use, too. I love your whole layout, actually. The header is well done and I think the simplicity of the black and white compliments the items you use.
I think you're off to a great start. Just definitely do a sweep for typos at some point (it was mostly just misplaced commas and apostrophes.)